Last week we dealt with five questions a nonfiction proposal must answer. As promised, we now turn to those who are putting together a novel proposal.
If you compare these two posts, you’ll see why a one-size-fits-all proposal template isn’t always helpful. There are differences between the two types of proposals. Please try not to shoehorn a novel proposal into a nonfiction presentation.
What Is Your Word Count?
Think carefully before you put a number in your proposal. I don’t know how often I’ve seen someone propose a 270,000-word manuscript or, on the other end, a 27,000 word-manuscript. (One zero can make a big difference!)
Your novel may be complete and you are just telling the agent or editor its length. But your word count might be a reason it is being rejected.
Here is a simple rule of thumb: Take your word count and divide it by 300. The answer will be the approximate page count of a printed book. Therefore, a 280,000-word manuscript becomes a 900-page doorstop. And a 28,000-word manuscript is more like a booklet or short story of 90 pages.
You might say, “But in ebooks the page count doesn’t matter!” True. But ebooks are one format–and not the only one. Major publishers still sell more than 50% of their fiction in printed form.
What is the ideal length? It depends.
I can hear the cry, “Steve! That is a singularly unhelpful answer!”
But it does depend on your genre and whether you are targeting a particular publisher. If you want to write for the Harlequin Love Inspired romance line or suspense line, your manuscript should be around 55,000-60,000 words.
If you are targeting the longer-form novel, your story should be between 80,000 and 100,000 words. There is often room for more than 100,000 words, but don’t go overboard.
But if you are writing epic fantasy and want Enclave Publishing to grab it, the length can go higher because that genre lends itself to longer stories (hence the word “epic”). For example, the fantasy novel Embers (Book one of the Abiassa’s Fire series) by Ronie Kendig came in at around 132,000 words. In printed form, it is 448 pages long (in a 6×9 trim size).
If you are writing a novella, then, of course, the short length is appropriate.
That is why I must answer, “It depends.”
When Will Your Manuscript Be Complete?
If you are a first-time novelist, never before published, your answer should be, “The manuscript is complete and available upon request.” Agents and publishers rarely will take a book from a debut author unless it is already complete.
Why? Because you might have spent 15 years perfecting your opening chapters, but the story falls apart on page 200. We have to have confidence in the whole story before we represent it or before a publisher will contract it.
If you are an established author with a track record with major publishers, you know to pick a reasonable completion date that you are confident in achieving. A publisher will look at your delivery date and begin planning which season your book will release to the market (usually 12-15 months from that delivery date).
What Is Your Unique Story Hook?
What about your story makes a reader salivate in anticipation of reading? Some call this “high concept,” but not all novels are “high concept.” (Read Randy Ingermanson’s excellent article linked here, “What is High Concept?” for a full explanation.)
Unfortunately, it is hard to come up with a story pitch that doesn’t sound like all the others. Darcy Patterson wrote an article identifying the 29 Basic Plot Templates. This is why novels can tend to sound the same if you are not careful.
A few years ago, I was at a writers conference taking 15-minute appointments all afternoon. At one point the room emptied and only I and one other editor remained. We stretched and yawned at the same time and began to laugh at that. Then the editor showed me a small card where this editor had made quick notes all afternoon about their appointments and the pitches presented throughout the conference. It had a list that looked a bit like this with tally marks (This is not the actual list, but a representation of it.):
Prairie romance III
Single girl looks for love I
Tornado IIII
Kidnap II
Drowning I
Losing ranch I
Angels vs. Demons I
Cancer IIII
Death in Family II
Big City setting I
Small Town setting IIII
The editor then said, “Where is the originality? They all start sounding the same.”
See the problem? Of course, you might argue that this is a problem with the novels already being published. To a point that is true. But if you go into the general market and look at the breakout novels of recent years, you’ll often find a common thread of a unique story or setting. Consider some of the following: Gone Girl, The Help, All the Light We Cannot See, The Fault in Our Stars, Goldfinch, and The Book Thief.
Below is the hook we used with Ginny Yttrup’s novel Words at the top of her book proposal.
Sticks and stones can break my bones,
but Words? They can always heal me.
A child whose silence holds the truth captive…
An artist whose work speaks the agony of her past…
Will they let the truth set them free?
Following are the first lines from the novel:
“I collect words. I keep them in a box in my mind. I’d like to keep them in a real box, something pretty, maybe a shoe box covered with flowered wrapping paper. Whenever I wanted, I’d open the box and pick up the papers, reading and feeling the words all at once. Then I could hide the box. But the words are safer in my mind. There, he can’t take them.”
That proposal sold quickly, and the book later won a Christy Award for “Best First Novel” because the writing is amazing. This leads me to the last question.
Is Your Writing Amazing?
I do not expect you to actually answer that question in your proposal, but the execution of your idea has to be truly incredible. The bar of success is set very high, and it isn’t something that can be dashed off in a few hours and tossed into the marketplace. It can take years to learn how to write well.
I’ve said it before: Some are born with the gift of writing, and with a nudge here and there they can create something wonderful. For the rest of us, it is something that must be learned. Learned through failures, missteps, false starts, and manuscripts that should be buried in the compost pile in the backyard.
I know many writers, and am privileged to represent a number of them, who have toiled for years to get to the point where their ideas and their writing skills combine to produce the novels the marketplace wants to read. It can be an arduous journey. I hope you are willing to take it!
Andrew Budek-Schmeisser
Word count seems the agent-passion,
but it’s no capricious rut;
they’re bricks enough to build a mansion
or doled out for a one-room hut.
And plots, boy, they have seen them all,
and far too many look the same
when tacked up to the inbox wall;
can no-one play a different game
that yet meets the hard deadline,
and offers not pie-in-the-sky
for hope the work will be refined
before agent and author die?
Add to this great writing form…
now go and catch your unicorn!
Tiffany Price
Hi Steve,
This is a great blog post – one I find incredibly fitting for my fictional endeavours. Thanks for providing this information and for setting the standard high at the Steve Laube Agency. I love what you all are doing in the Christian Publishing world!
Elliott Slaughter
What strikes me about this list is that everything here could be more than adequately conveyed in a query plus opening pages.
Word count? A query has it.
Manuscript status? A query has it. (And again, you don’t even send the query unless it’s ready.)
Hook? A query has it.
Sample chapters? Again, usually a query is accompanied by them.
As best I can tell, general market agents don’t ask for proposals for fiction (at least not up front). It seems to be a Christian market thing. Is there a reason for this?
Elliott Slaughter
Just to add my own little bit of speculation: I suspect it’s because the Christian market has historically focused mainly on nonfiction, that the proposal became standard across the entire industry, including fiction once that began to emerge.
But I’d be curious to see what other people think.
Steve Laube
Elliott,
Read Tamela’s post from a month ago: https://stevelaube.com/query-proposal-or-complete/
I’m of the opinion that a full proposal includes many key elements that a query cannot.
a) something about the author. You are a stranger, introduce yourself beyond one line in a query.
b) your marketing plan. If your plan is to write the book and sit back to let everyone else promote your work, fine. But major publishers want to partner with their authors and lean into the author’s network. A query cannot show this.
c) a full synopsis of the entire story cannot be in a query.
d) you mention sample chapters. Okay. That, in my definition, is not a query. A query is a one page letter pitching an idea. Thus it can come down to the definition of the publishing lingo.
Elliott Slaughter
Thanks, got it!
Loretta Eidson
Thank you for speaking the truth and sharing this valuable insight. Coming up with fresh ideas sometimes seems daunting, but it can be done.
Steve
How did Fire and ash make it? Horrible writing, bad grammar, choppy. Is it because there is no other material to publish? Really curious. I would love to see her proposal letter.
Steve Laube
This is not the place for critiquing books.
Novels strike readers differently. For one it is trash. For another it is treasure.
I happen to think OF FIRE AND ASH by Gillian Bronte Adams is a brilliant YA epic fantasy and absolutely deserved the book of the year award it received ten days ago.
You are entitled to your opinion. Give your copy of the book to a teenage reader and see if they think it is so terrible.
Sheri Dean Parmelee, Ph.D.
Steve, I guess my 110,000 word novel is about 367 pages, which places it somewhere between a doorstop and a booklet….. Hopefully, it will be read, not used to prop a door open!
Kristen Joy Wilks
Thank you so much! This made me go back and look at my first page one more time. Did I highlight my manuscripts unique elements from the very beginning?
Megan Schaulis
Hi Steve,
This post came at the perfect time as I prep my materials for the ACFW conference. See you there!
Amber Lemus
Thank you for the time and effort to put together this post and share it with us at a great time.
Rita Rogers
Thanks so much! I will be studying this post thoroughly.