Welcome back to our series on story structure.
As I’ve said before, this is only one of many options to choose from when it comes to plotting your stories. In the last two posts, I covered the inciting incident and Plot Point 1.
I left poor Oliver attacked outside the restaurant with a head wound and a warning to “let the dead stay dead.” Someone doesn’t want the skull reconstructed. Oliver’s response? “Whoever didn’t want her face to be revealed just made a huge mistake. I’m going to be working on that reconstruction day and night now.”
Because that’s how heroes respond, right?
Now, I did a little research (because that’s what good authors do!); and I discovered it really doesn’t take long to reconstruct the skull as long as one can work pretty consistently. Here’s what one forensic artist and author, Carrie Stuart Parks, said, “It took Betty Pat Gatliff, the gal who trained most of us, three days with clay. It takes my students about that same amount of time in class. To do a drawing (2D reconstruction), more like a day to day and a half (depending on hair–corn rows take forever!). Using an iPad and a program might be even faster–a day?”
So, now I have a little bit of a timeline to work with. Timelines are very important, and sometimes you have to stop and figure stuff like this out before you can move forward. But we now have an answer. Because I’d like to drag this out a bit, I’m going to have a few interruptions along the way, delaying the completion of the reconstruction despite Oliver’s good intentions to get it done warp-speed fast. At this point, I may take the time to brainstorm what some of those interruptions could be.
But somewhere between the end of act one and the midpoint of the story (for me, the midpoint is usually around 40,000 words), we’re going to have Pinch Point #1.
A “pinch point” in a story is a moment when the antagonist’s power is showcased, applying pressure to the protagonist and emphasizing the stakes at hand. Pinch point #1 usually occurs around the midpoint of the first half of the story, serving as a reminder of the antagonist’s strength and the challenges the protagonist must overcome.
Here are two well-known examples of pinch points:
1. Harry Potter and the Philosopher’s Stone by J.K. Rowling:
- Pinch Point #1: Harry’s first encounter with Voldemort in the Forbidden Forest serves as a pinch point. Here, the audience sees the power and malevolence of the antagonist, emphasizing the danger Harry is in.
2. The Lord of the Rings by J.R.R. Tolkien:
- Pinch Point #1: The encounter with the Ringwraiths in the Shire is a pinch point. It shows the power and determination of Sauron’s forces, emphasizing the perilous journey ahead for Frodo.
So, let’s figure out what our first pinch point is for Oliver and Sophia. This is what I came up with. Oliver’s at the lab working on the reconstruction, determined to get it done now that he can work without his head spinning. There’s security; he’s in a locked room. Yet the antagonist still manages to get in and leave a mysterious package outside the door. Inside the package, Oliver finds a detailed, eerie painting that mirrors the incomplete facial reconstruction of the Jane Doe he’s been working on. The only difference is the painting has a single tear painted on Jane Doe’s partially finished face. The message is clear. Someone is watching him closely and is aware of his progress.
Yikes! Right?
And the investigation would ramp up from there, racing us to the midpoint of the story—which I will talk about next time.
Someone left a comment about the lack of subplots in this outline. That’s true for now. As I said at the beginning of this series, I build the foundation first, using this method. First, the characters and their backgrounds, their conflicts (which will involve the subplots that you’ll weave in after you get your foundation laid), and then I move on to layering the story with more. Again, this is my method. You may use something else, and that’s perfectly fine. Use what works for you.
On that note, take a look at your manuscript; see if you can pinpoint your first pinch point. It should be somewhere between the end of Act I and the midpoint. Since my midpoint is 40K words (50%), my first pinch point lands around the 25K mark (37-40%). Again, sometimes this will be a little off. Sometimes it happens a little earlier or a little later. And that’s okay as long as it doesn’t hamper the flow of the story.
I hope you’re enjoying this series. I’m having a blast writing it. And I want to know what happens with the skull he’s reconstructing because, honestly, I have no idea. So, now I’m going to write the next blog post and see if I can figure it out. If you have some input on who it needs to be, feel free to let me know that too! Does it need to be the heroine’s sister, Cassidy? Or…? Also, who is the villain?? Anyone? Bueller?
Yes, this is how I plot a story. And yes, it works for me. But whether or not this particular process works for you, maybe you can pull a little piece of helpful information from the post. I sure hope so.
Now, you go do you and write something spectacular.
Andrew Budek-Schmeisser
Lynette, a request…in these wonderfully informative serial posts, could you provide a link back to previous episodes?
It’s interesting how what we read shapes our writing. For me, the stories of Nevil Shute and Susan Howatch’s ‘Starbridge’ series were inspiration, and they don’t contain true antagonists, merely misguided or stuffy characters. The conflict arises situationally, and seems to me more relatable.
I have never tried to write
’bout all that villain stuff,
because I find that life doth quite
offer way more than enough
obstacles to overcome,
and heartbreak to endure;
I learned this when I was young
and in these days I am more sure
that evil is a mindless thing
set loose to walk abroad.
There is not a need to bring
dark purpose to those merely flawed,
to those who bid the devil win
through a dismal, venal sin.
Lynette Eason
Good point. I’ll be sure to put the links in to previous posts. Thank you for asking. and thank you for your beautiful poems. Have a blessed day!
Andrew Budek-Schmeisser
Lynette, thank you for your gracious words, but even more, thank you for providing this well-thought-out and crafted blueprint to the writing of narrative fiction.
I know that you’ve given hope to many who thought they were facing an insurmountable task, and rekindled enthusiasm in the hearts of those who wearied of hacking their way through the Vale of Characterization and the Slough of Plot.
Sandra Vosburgh
Thank you, Lynette, the package wasn’t a bomb. So overdone. But a partially reconstructed face with a tear? Only you would think of that!
Lynette Eason
LOL! Thank you, Sandy, glad you appreciated that. 🙂 Have a lovely day and thanks for stopping by!
Becky Antkowiak
Ah, Yes, link-backs are a great idea.
This is great information!
And . . . “Bueller?” 😆 Love it.
Lynette Eason
Link-backs coming in future posts! Glad you find the information helpful. And yes…Bueller! 🤣🤣😁 I can never watch that movie enough times. hehe. It’s a classic. 🙂
Jen Booth
Oh, that tear… yikes, indeed!
I appreciate how you described the pinch point in a way that is easy to understand. Great information in this series!
Lynette Eason
Haha. Thanks! 🙂 And you’re very welcome. Glad you’re enjoying.
Kay DiBianca
A “pinch point” in a story is a moment when the antagonist’s power is showcased, applying pressure to the protagonist and emphasizing the stakes at hand.
Thanks for this succinct definition. Very helpful!
Lynette Eason
Hi Kay, so glad you found it helpful. Have a blessed day!
Gordon
. I appreciate how useful these posts are—the elements of superior stories—so that we might evaluate what we’ve written, with eyes and ears heavenward for Yea and Amen.
Lynette Eason
Thank you, Gordon. Glad you find them useful. Have a blessed day.
Gordon
Question: is there anything j.k. Rowling or Tolkien or Lewis have said or written that reveal how they planned the pinch points of their stories/series? Those three in particular have so MANY pinch points in their series and I wonder if they were preplanned or more spontaneous?
Dienece Darling
Yes, I am very much enjoying this series. Both the tips and the story. Looking forward to the next one!
Elizabeth Wilson
I am loving this series! Story structure can be presented so technically, that the art of story gets lost of me. However, this series is so fun and enjoyable to read. Thank you for your work!