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Welcome back to our series on story structure. Last time I talked about Pinch Point #1.
Remember, a “pinch point” in a story is a moment where the antagonist’s power is showcased, applying pressure to the protagonist and emphasizing the stakes at hand. Pinch Point #1 usually occurs around the midpoint of the first half of the story, serving as a reminder of the antagonist’s strength and the challenges the protagonist must overcome. The pinch point in Oliver’s story is the message with the painting containing the incomplete facial reconstruction, only there’s a single tear painted on her partially finished face.
Now, we’ve arrived at the midpoint of the story. This is where your protagonist has some kind of “mirror moment,” an epiphany about himself or herself for character growth. It can also be a good place to have some kind of break in the case. Or a new character shows up to create havoc. Or your main character’s secret child shows up.
For now, in our story, up until this point Oliver has been trying to finish the face; but a car accident leaves him unable to work for a few days. He’s had to send his daughter and mother to stay with other relatives because of the increasing danger. And so on. But, now we’re at the middle of the book and the reconstruction is finally finished and … it’s not Cassidy, Sophia’s sister. However, the face is eerily familiar to Sophia. It’s a friend of Cassidy’s from high school who also went missing, but everyone thought she’d run away because she was a “troubled teen.” Sophia immediately knows this is connected to her sister’s disappearance.
Now, because of the pantser that I can be (someone who tends to write by the seat of their pants as opposed to a plotter who plots everything out), I’ve decided that Oliver’s daughter (Have I given her a name? If not, let’s call her Gia.) had been working on a school project. (I’ll introduce this right at the beginning of the story, and it will become a subplot.) She and her class have been researching the town’s history for a special program.
When Oliver sent her away, she left what she’d been working on, thinking everything would be resolved and she’d get back to it in a couple of days. She had newspaper articles and pictures spread across the dining room table. When the face he finishes is finally revealed, not only does Sophia recognize her, so does he. She’s in several of the pictures on his dining room table. As are Sohpia’s parents.
WHAT??
I know, right? I’m as shocked as you are! What could this possibly mean? And there you have it. We’re at the midpoint. We’ve got our turning point in the story. This stunning revelation not only takes the investigation in a whole new direction, it does Sophia’s personal life as well (more subplot material). While Sophia was relieved that the dead woman isn’t her sister, she’s still got questions. Sophia’s mirror moment is that she knows she will not rest until she uncovers the rest of the secrets and finds out what happened to her big sister. What are her parents hiding?
I have no idea!
But we’ll find out. Eventually. So, there you have it. Take a look at your midpoint and see what it does for the story. Sometimes it’s a subtle shift. Sometimes it’s major, but it should be there, whatever you decide it is. I’ll be honest. Sometimes I don’t know what my midpoint is until I get there. I’ve been at 50,000 words and think, Wait, what’s my midpoint? And I have to go back and make sure it’s clear. Other times, depending on how well laid out I have the story in my head, I know exactly what my midpoint will be. (I’ll admit that makes things a bit easier when it comes to writing the first half of the story! LOL.)
Anyway, what do you think makes a good midpoint? I’m interested in hearing your thoughts.
Have a blessed day!
Andrew Budek-Schmeisser
Best midpoint for a story,
as I’ve been called to learn,
is the shining of God’s glory
on the point of no return,
where going forward will prevent
going back to how things were,
an illumination Heaven-sent,
though protag must from here endure
fate’s lethal slings and arrows,
sometimes feeling lost, bereft,
now ranked ‘neath fallen sparrows,
but yet must find the strength to heft
his own cross on that uphill road
’till he sees that yes, God shares his load.
Tannye johnson
The mid point in my story is when a person who rejects God sets fire the the Christian families cabin. Sarah and Payton are stuck on the roof with no way down. An Angel shows up and helps them jump the long distance to a tree to escape. It was an answer to prayer. It shows the unseen world that exists on Earth and that God is in control of the universe.
Nathan Perkins
This post brought to mind pinch points in my own life. They came when I had to make difficult decisions. These included things like; financial gain versus integrity, which friend to impress, or the proverbial straight and narrow versus the road everyone else is taking.
I appreciate your words. They will help me to tell better stories.
georgia francis
Please tell us how we can continue to think with any creativity whatsoever when the world, California in particular, is in such an unhinged condition?
Everyday that I’ve made up my mind to write, depression, due to the price of gas and food, seems to overwhelm me.
I go for a walk, listen to classical music, eat dark chocolate, have a banana, talk to God, seek help from YouTube videos, and still this dark cloud of uncertainty looms.
Any suggestions I haven’t already tried? A few weeks ago I had thought of driving off a cliff but then realized I hadn’t emptied the dishwasher. See, I’m not ready to die, just ready to sleep and wake up in 2025.
No one has written an article about what I’m going through, AND I know I’m not alone. Although, some may not want to admit it.