Time to Play!

As I was considering what to write for this week’s blog, I realized I needed a break from all the seriousness of the last few weeks. Not that I don’t love the “conversations” and insights everyone has shared. But, at the core, I’m a golden-retriever kinda gal, and I gots to play! So today seemed perfect for a game I love: First Lines.

SO! Get your play on, folks, and share your first line—and ONLY the first line–of a project you’re working on. Fiction, nonfiction, children’s, short story…we love ‘em all. Now is your chance to test your line out on some readers.

Here’s mine, from a nonfiction project I’m working on:

It took an angry hummingbird to open my eyes.

Ready? Set. Go!



77 Responses to Time to Play!

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    Justin Swanton May 31, 2017 at 3:31 am #

    We were four months out when they told us.

    (First line of my hard SF Christian novel ‘Immortelle’)

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      Cathy Hinkle May 31, 2017 at 6:33 am #

      Ok, I’ll bite… told you what? 🙂

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        Justin Swanton May 31, 2017 at 7:00 am #

        Oh, nothing much. Just that 1036 Ganymed, a 20-mile wide asteroid, had been knocked from its orbit by impact with a planetesimal and would collide with Earth whilst they were on the first manned mission to Mars.

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          Cathy Hinkle May 31, 2017 at 1:39 pm #

          I like that! It would be bad for the people, but make for some good sci-fi! I like it! It’s a lot of research, isn’t it? 🙂 (Working on sci-fi, myself, and I’m giving a friend writing historical fiction a run for her research time.) Keep on going!

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            Justin Swanton May 31, 2017 at 10:35 pm #

            Glad you like it.

            Yes, hard SF has proved a lot of research – things like how a thermal nuclear motor works, the difference between aerobraking and aerocapture, what could go wrong with the cooling system of a suitcase reactor, etc. Been fun though.

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        Sally Bradley May 31, 2017 at 9:08 am #

        Great line!

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    Brennan S. McPherson May 31, 2017 at 3:59 am #

    “The Hunter awoke with his back to a stone floor and his gaze to a vaulted marble ceiling.”

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    Jane Tucker May 31, 2017 at 4:40 am #

    “Don’t call us, Mr. Arnold. We’ll call you.”

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    Rebekah Dorris May 31, 2017 at 4:44 am #

    “Once upon a time—”

    “Titus Ford! You’re telling me a fairy tale? Oh, please! I ain’t no baby!”

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    Kirsten Panachyda May 31, 2017 at 4:56 am #

    The day the wounded young acolyte stumbled into the compound, Tiann was helping with the endless weaving.

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    Charles Franklin May 31, 2017 at 4:58 am #

    A century after The Great War, in a city believed to be Earth’s last, Arik Martin helped lower his dead friend into the ground.

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    Andrew Budek-Schmeisser May 31, 2017 at 6:08 am #

    Across the candle-lit table Hermoine’s eyes sparkled like sapphires, and when she smiled Sebastian realized that he needed to pick up dental floss on the way home.

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    CJ Myerly May 31, 2017 at 6:26 am #

    Ryley Rhodes punched the air in front of her, her feet stumbling through the quick step while she tried to follow the insane exercise instructor on her flat screen.

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      Hope May 31, 2017 at 7:45 am #

      That’s me!

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    Cathy Hinkle May 31, 2017 at 6:32 am #

    The moon shone down with clear white purity the first time I ever saw a sky.

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    Martha Whiteman Rogers May 31, 2017 at 6:33 am #

    Josephine Weatherby slammed the door and shook her bony finger at Emma’s face.

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      Cathy Hinkle May 31, 2017 at 6:34 am #

      Love the name, and the bony finger. 🙂

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      Bob May 31, 2017 at 4:50 pm #

      Intriguing start.

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    Janetta Messmer May 31, 2017 at 6:40 am #

    “She’s up to something, Mary, and we’re going to find out what it is.”

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    Marie Wells Coutu May 31, 2017 at 6:46 am #

    The familiar knock came before the rooster crowed.

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    Katie Powner May 31, 2017 at 6:54 am #

    His middle name was Havok, but I didn’t know that until it was too late.

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    Carol Ashby May 31, 2017 at 7:00 am #

    Saying goodbye was always hard; when it’s your youngest daughter, that punched a hole in a father’s heart.

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    Carol Tanksley May 31, 2017 at 7:03 am #

    They say you shouldn’t begin with “the phone rang.” But my phone did ring at 2am.

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    Jay Payleitner May 31, 2017 at 7:05 am #

    Imagine the Creator of the Universe sitting across from you as you map out your day, week, and life.

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      Peggy Booher May 31, 2017 at 6:27 pm #

      Wow! I like it! I’d like to read the rest of it, too!

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    Jennifer Deibel May 31, 2017 at 7:39 am #

    She was going to fail.

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    Hope May 31, 2017 at 7:44 am #

    The plane landed.
    (2nd novel of God’s Girl)

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    Diana Harkness May 31, 2017 at 7:51 am #

    He shivered and drew his cloak around him, hugging it tightly as the night’s breath rustled the wiry boughs and cast a few dry leaves to the ground.

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    Nicola May 31, 2017 at 8:22 am #

    Clariseen’s eyes ached trying to see how far she could see.

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    Henry Styron May 31, 2017 at 8:26 am #

    Have you ever been invited to dinner, or to a date, or as a houseguest, and you arrived at the appointed time and place and found that everything had been made ready for you?

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    Damon J. Gray May 31, 2017 at 8:42 am #

    Every spring, for the past six years, I have watched the farmer plow his field.

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    Andrew Budek-Schmeisser May 31, 2017 at 8:44 am #

    I’ve got to build a story around this, but here goes:

    “Mom, of COURSE I wouldn’t have gone out with him if I knew he was a trending hashtag!”

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    Norma Brumbaugh May 31, 2017 at 8:46 am #

    Her eyes alight with awe as she gazes into the globe; it is magical, like a snow scene in Toyland.

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    Danise DiStasi May 31, 2017 at 8:50 am #

    By now you must be wondering what a dog has to do with leadership development.

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    Heather Marsten May 31, 2017 at 9:22 am #

    I hate boys’ games.

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    Mindy Peltier May 31, 2017 at 10:08 am #

    Wendy didn’t wake up with the usual hangover after Ladies Night, she woke up drunk.

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    Loretta May 31, 2017 at 10:41 am #

    Maybe it’s just me but sometimes I feel invisible in this big world, like no one see’s or cares about what’s happening to me or in my heart.

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    Mary-Anne Crooks May 31, 2017 at 11:01 am #

    Dad’s shouting for us Danielle. Seriously sick of this yacht. Wish it was finished already.

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    Kristen Joy Wilks May 31, 2017 at 11:02 am #

    I gave my sister a sheepish smile in lieu of an apology and then ducked beneath the antique pew.

    (YA, Contemporary Paranormal)

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    Mary-Anne Crooks May 31, 2017 at 11:03 am #

    Crackle and heat from the red-glowing bush-land assailed the senses.

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    Mary-Anne Crooks May 31, 2017 at 11:08 am #

    Dr Mendel’s arctic blue eyes darted from scientist to scientist, the creases that outlined his eyes were rigid and his pale eyelashes fluttered.

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    Mary-Anne Crooks May 31, 2017 at 11:10 am #

    Hatred, it filled the air, my lungs, my senses – why had I married this man?

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    Sally Farrell May 31, 2017 at 11:21 am #

    The trees talked. Branches touching, crowns bowed, huddled in a circle, they soughed and sighed, shivering their shared secrets.

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    Mary-Anne Crooks May 31, 2017 at 11:26 am #

    Zebedee ran helter skelter into the room, slid on the wooden floor, applied brakes too late, went into a full slide and crashed into the suitcase.

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    Debra L. Butterfield May 31, 2017 at 11:38 am #

    He was finally dead.

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    Linda May 31, 2017 at 11:44 am #

    Ashes from Will Ryan’s dying cigarette sprinkled onto his hand as he fished around in his Wranglers pockets for his last twenty.

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    Linda May 31, 2017 at 11:48 am #

    Ashes from Will Ryan’s dying cigarette sprinkled his hand as he searched his worn Wranglers pockets for his last twenty.

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    S.A.Farrell May 31, 2017 at 12:00 pm #

    My name is Theodor Winston Isambard King and I hate it.

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      Andrew Budek-Schmeisser May 31, 2017 at 12:10 pm #

      If my initials formed the acronym ‘TWIK’ I’d hate it too.

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        S.A.Farrell May 31, 2017 at 2:19 pm #

        His goth sister calls him Twix…and English chocolate bar…he hates that too!

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    Edward Lane May 31, 2017 at 12:11 pm #

    She didn’t see the pockmarked face of the man peering over the edge of the boat as Ben and she embraced.

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    Jennifer Deibel May 31, 2017 at 1:18 pm #

    I’m thinking about changing mine to:

    “All her life, Moira Doherty had longed to see the places her mother told her about.”

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    Carrie Stuart Parks May 31, 2017 at 3:23 pm #

    Who’d have thought admitting to drawing skills would land her in an early morning rendezvous with a dying man?

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    Henry Styron May 31, 2017 at 3:46 pm #

    “Mr. Monster’s best friend Elspeth worked in a flower shop.”

    (Children’s book)

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    Robin E. Mason May 31, 2017 at 4:02 pm #

    It couldn’t be her; she was dead, we had all watched her die, floating away like that in the swamp.

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    Bob May 31, 2017 at 4:39 pm #

    I’m thirteen years old and pretty tough, I can handle a rifle and my double barrel shotgun.

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    Daniel J. Parker May 31, 2017 at 4:41 pm #

    “BORN TO DIE?…BORN TO DIE?…BORN TO DIE? …NO…PLEASE …NO !” (Mary, the mother of Jesus, during a conversatition with God during a dream. From The Gifts-Part II)

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    Tracey Dyck May 31, 2017 at 5:15 pm #

    There’s some serious talent showing up here! I like it!

    My first line: Not in centuries had the mountains rung with such gladness. (YA fairy tale retelling)

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    Karen Ball May 31, 2017 at 5:46 pm #

    Oh, what fun! Thank you all for joining in!

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      Justin Swanton May 31, 2017 at 10:37 pm #

      You haven’t worked it out? We’re all submitting!

      (BTW I’ve got a really, really good MS…)

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    Mary-Anne Crooks May 31, 2017 at 10:16 pm #

    Do you want to spice up your relationship: Recipes for a Yummy Marriage

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    Michael Emmanuel May 31, 2017 at 11:15 pm #

    One – The cop ushered me into the room and hushed the door.

    Two – “What is your name?”

    Three – It was 4:17pm when the call came in.

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    Joyce Glass June 1, 2017 at 11:15 am #

    Jessica wrapped her jacket tighter to keep the crisp wind of the morning from cutting right through her skin as she walked across the campus.

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